TᕼE ᑌᑎᖴOᖇTᑌᑎᗩTE ᗪIᔕᗩᔕTEᖇ
ƙια σɾα ҽʋҽɾყσɳҽ,
How is lockdown going for you? Today I am going to share with you one of my quick writes. A quick write is when you have a certain amount of time to write a story anyway further enough here is my quick write.
To support my learning I ask you to comment as follows:
1. Something positive - Begin with a greeting. Talk about something you like about what I have shared.
2. Thoughtful - A comment that will mean something to me to let me know you read/watched or listened to what I had to say. - use any language.
3. Something helpful - Give me some ideas for next time or ask me a question.
Encourage me to make another post.
Kia Ora India,
ReplyDeleteMy lockdown has been great but I wish we could go back to school. I like the way you used my name in your piece of writing. Maybe you could make the doc bigger so it's easier to read. I also like how you have made the word disaster in different writing. Overall you did really well and your writing was very descriptive. :)
Hi India,
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing your quick write. This was the story that made me laugh - great use of language to create a bit of humour for the reader, and 'talking' animals always make for a good story!
Miss Roberts
Hello India,
ReplyDeleteLockdown for me is definitely boring, but thanks for asking!I read your quick write and I thought it was very funny and I very much enjoyed reading it. I know that it is hard to change the size of the doc, but it would be helpful if you did that. I have a few tips on your writing for you. When a character is talking, there are speech marks (That look like this: "Hi") which mean that a someone is talking. That's all I have for feedback. I love your story, and I hope that you will post more of your story starters on here!If you want to check out my blog here is the link: https://marmabelh.blogspot.com/
Thanks for reading my comment,
Bye, Mabel.